Today I was learning how to at detail into our writing about my bedroom. I enjoyed publishing this on my chromebook. I found it challenging to think of what to write, writing is the subject that i'm not as good at. My digital learning object shows my bedroom writing. Next time I will describe my room a bit better.
My cosy bedroom
It’s my favorite part of the house,my bedroom. I love it! It’s really pink and my bed is so bouncy .IT’S PERFECTION!! Oh and it’s got a nice fluffy sheep skin in the middle of the room that is as soft as a unsawn sheep.
My room has got pink walls. My bed is on the side of my room under the window, out my window in the mornings I can hear the birds outside and see the flowers on the other side of the driveway. Sometimes I like to go on my mum's phone and read at night.
My room gets messy easily. Some nights my cat comes and sleeps on my bed. There are books everywhere, I love reading!! I think my bedroom is really cosy. My cat is fluffy.
My room makes me feel calm. It smells like me because I am in there a lot. Sometimes in the morning when I wake up early since my step dad goes to work early I can hear him in the kitchen
Overall I think that my room is the best room in the house,and also I think it’s really cosy. Most of the time it’s messy though.
What a great blog, l love your bedroom and it is extra special when l get to sleep in YOUR bed and you sleep on the air bed!!! Your writing is improving with every blog l read. Keep up the good work,Alexis. When can l come to stay again???? Just joking. Love from Gramma.
ReplyDeleteTalofa Alexis,
ReplyDeleteI can feel how cosy your room would be from how you have described it. I love the way you put an emphasis on the word 'perfection' it drew me in as a reader.
It would be nice to see you add more decriptive words or similes to help me picture how fluffy or how pink your cosy room is.
Fa'afetai
Koka Kalo